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The government should provide free public transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce traffic and congestion. To what extent do you agree or disagree and give your opinion.

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Many large cities are suffering from overloaded roads and the local
government
 tries to find some solutions.
Consequently
, terrible situations on the road and
traffic
 jams cause car accidents, air pollution and extra stress for people. I strongly agree that a free constant public
transportation
 system can help with tackling the issue. In my essay, I am going to introduce the ideas to support my point of view.
Firstly
, if people have access to free public transport day and night,
then
 they probably would prefer it over their private vehicles. In
this
 case, obviously, the number of cars outside will be decreased.
As a result
, people will deal with fewer
traffic
 jams and save much time, as well the situation with air pollution can be improved.
Moreover
, the less number of cars there are on the roads, the more free space there is for other infrastructure.
Nevertheless
, making public
transportation
 free of charge is not the only possible solution.
Additionally
, the
government
 can implement extra taxes for car owners.
This
 will force society to choose trains and buses and will provide the
government
 with additional financing, which can be used to improve city
transportation
.
For example
, the
government
 can organise more metro lines and open new bus stops. Another way is to set certain limits,
for example
, only one private car per family. As far as I am concerned,
this
 restriction was implemented in China and worked successfully. Taking everything into account, despite the number of different methods to reduce
traffic
 on roads, I do claim that making
transportation
 free and accessible to everyone is the key factor. In the case of implementing
this
 measure, city residents can hope to have fewer cars, less
traffic
 and more green areas.
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task achievement
Some points and ideas introduced in the essay could benefit from further development. Consider providing more detailed explanations and examples, particularly for the suggested solutions beyond free public transportation.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that transitions between paragraphs are smooth and explicitly show how each idea connects to your overall argument. This can help to improve coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, fulfilling requirements for coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay comprehensively addresses the task, discussing the benefits and providing multiple solutions to the problem of traffic congestion.
task achievement
Main points are clearly presented and generally well-supported with reasons and some specific examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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