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Task 1 The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information on the
quantity
 of Caribbean
Island
visitors
 between 2010 and 2017. From the graph, it is evident that the total number of
tourists
 has been steadily increasing over the period.
However
, alterations in the amount of
tourists
 staying on cruise ships and on
island
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 are not linear.
To begin
 with, the
quantity
 of
all
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tourists
 visiting
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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Island
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 was estimated at just 1
million
 in 2010. The increase in their
quantity
 was steady until 2015.
Then
, during the year there wasn’t any change, and the total
visitors
 amount remained at about 2.75
million
 in 2016.
At the end
 of the period - in 2017 - there was a sharp rise, and the line graph reached its peak at exactly 3.5
million
visitors
. As to the
tourists
 who were staying on
island
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the island
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, their number was
at
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nearly 0.75
million
during
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between
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 2010 and 2011. After
that
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 their amount went up in a
million
 over 2 years, when in 2013 it stopped changing before 2016.
Afterwards
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 a sudden drop and rise happened, and by the end of the
period
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period,
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 the number of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 had again reached its maximum at just 1.5. The graph line of the
tourists
 staying on cruise ships shows that their
quantity
 grew to 0.5 and fell to the initial value of 0.25 between 2010 and 2012
,
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 when it rapidly started to grow again and peaked in 2017 at 2
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quantity, island, visitors, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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