The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

• You should write at least 150 words.

• You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The line chart
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shows
the
number
of women and
men
had had heart attacks
on
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in
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one year in
USA
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the USA
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compared with ages between 29 to 65 and higher .
Overall
,
men
get
hearts
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heart
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attacks more than
womens
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women
women's
in
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of
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all ages
given
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.
Furthermore
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the
number
of both gender get closer at age 65
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above
. The
number
of women who get heart attacks
in
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age
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ages
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between 29 to 44 is only 3 compared with
men
it much
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higher
. The big
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is
in
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for
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age
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ages
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45-64 the
number
of
men
is 424
compard
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compared
with
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to
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womens
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women
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its
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it's
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • occurrence
  • prevalence
  • age group
  • gender disparities
  • notable trends
  • significant
  • comparison
  • discrepancies
  • patterns
  • statistics
  • demographics
  • rate of incidence
  • proportion
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