Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

I think the major environmental problem of our time is the special
species
of creature's
deminshing
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diminishing
. With regard to the environmental problem,it's hard to think about the various creature
species
.In our
word
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world
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,many animals and plants
were
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destroyed by people and some of them become rare.In my opinion,per
creatures
existing have
its
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their
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valuable
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,
such
as protecting
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the enviorment
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enviorment
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environment
,preventing some animals
reproducing
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from reproducing
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more and so on. It is
quit
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quite
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significant for us to protect
environment
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the environment
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.Serving the
creatures
in
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the envionment
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envionment
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environment
is one of the major
way
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ways
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to accompany it.Some particular animals and plants may help us reduce
the
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apply
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air pollution or some of them can
product
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produce
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oxygen for us.So protecting the
creatures
is more important for us.We should prevent the
creatures
which
is
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are
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beneficial for us
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from incresing
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incresing
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increasing
.After that,we could have more approaches to stay with
environment
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environmental
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hormony
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harmony
. The grass become less in our city.You even
jut
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just
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only can see it in the
playgroud
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playground
.
However
,the grass is too beneficial for us.It could offer
the
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apply
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oxygen
for
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to
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human
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.Except that,when we see the grass after a tried word in daily life,we will feel more cozy.
Overall
,the special
species
of
creature's
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creatures
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losing
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loss
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is one of the
serve
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severe
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problem
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problems
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in the
enviroment
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environment
.So preventing its decline is essential for
human
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humans
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.Our government should
adapt
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adopt
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some approaches to
aviod
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avoid
that
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those
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conditions appearing.
Following
this
, we could enjoy ourselves in the
enviorment
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environment
.The
creatures
in
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the enviorment
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enviorment
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environment
are one of the
porpotion
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portion
proportion
of global.It is necessary to conserve the particular
species
of plants and
annimals
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animals
in our daily life.
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The essay reflects a genuine concern for environmental issues and the importance of biodiversity.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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