The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The diagram displays the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and now.
Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is clear that
what stands out from the map is that it has become more modern and developed.
Firstly
, one of the changes is that tables and chairs from the middle of the library have been removed and at present it is an empty area. On the right-hand side of the diagram, there has been an equity desk from where people could buy tickets and return books
, but now there is a cafe. Instead
of the lecture room
, 20 years ago there was a children’s book selection. In the past, between the children's book room
and equity desks there was just an adult non-fiction books
section, while
now there are adult fiction books
, an information desk and self-service machines.
In addition
, on the northwest side of the library, there were CDs, videos and computer games archives but that place was extended and at the moment there are two sofas, the children’s fiction selection and a special place for storytelling events. As well as
the computer games area, the adult fiction books
were removed and replaced with all reference books
. Finally
, the reading room
with newspapers and magazines was demolished and a computer room
was built.Submitted by capibara11
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