The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The diagram displays the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and now. Looking from an
overall
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perspective,
it is clear that
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what stands out from the map is that it has become more modern and developed.
Firstly
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, one of the changes is that tables and chairs from the middle of the library have been removed and at present it is an empty area. On the right-hand side of the diagram, there has been an equity desk from where people could buy tickets and return
books
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, but now there is a cafe.
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of the lecture
room
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, 20 years ago there was a children’s book selection. In the past, between the children's book
room
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and equity desks there was just an adult non-fiction
books
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section,
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now there are adult fiction
books
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, an information desk and self-service machines.
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, on the northwest side of the library, there were CDs, videos and computer games archives but that place was extended and at the moment there are two sofas, the children’s fiction selection and a special place for storytelling events.
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the computer games area, the adult fiction
books
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were removed and replaced with all reference
books
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.
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, the reading
room
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with newspapers and magazines was demolished and a computer
room
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was built.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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