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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Write at least 150 words. You may spend 20 minutes to complete the task
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The bar charts provide key information about the expenses
for
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two
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the two
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 countries on consumer goods throughout 2010. The units are measured in millions .
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that cars are the highest number among the other goods.
In addition
UK
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the UK
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is
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has
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 already taken the big figures,
whereas
France
 has taken the lowest numbers.
According to
 what is shown, cars are exactly at 450
million
 in
UK
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the UK
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, meanwhile, vehicles in
France
 at 400
million
 and, the difference between both
of
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Britain and
France
 is 50
million
. Computers
on the other hand
,
France
 surpassed Great Britain by approximately 20
million
as well as
a
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perfume but the difference is 50
million
 In terms of books,
UK
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the UK
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,
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 achieved 400
million
 and,
France
 achieved less than 350
million
 and
finally
 cameras Britain
had
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achieved
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 more than 350
million
 and,
France
 is significantly less than
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 by Around 30
million
 or maybe more.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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