The table shows the worldwide market share of mobile phone manufacturers in the 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the

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presence of three mobile phone operating systems in five countries in 2015

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, android-based smartphones dominated the

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of all nations. It is

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noticeable that iOS devices were more popular in more developed countries. In detail, the

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in Brazil in 2015 was 91%, 20% higher than that in China and Germany.

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a difference was twice as much when comparing the figure for Brazil with the UK and the USA, the latter standing at over a half. In stark contrast, windows-based devices

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the least popular, accounting for below 10% in each

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, reaching as low as 1% in China. iOS was the second most widely used operating system, taking up around 40%

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in the UK and the USA. Its

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shrunk twofold in China to one-fourth

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and was even lower in Germany at nearly one-fifth. Being the least economically developed nation out of the five, Brazil had only a negligible 4% of its mobile phone platform

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belonging to iOS.

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The table shows the worldwide market share of mobile phone manufacturers in the 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people say that fashion affects our lives in a negative way however others say that it has more positive effects on our life discuss and give your opinion??

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