The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The graph gives information about how often Americans ate in
fast food
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fast-food
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restaurants from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
, the most frequent time over the period given was once a
week
and
one
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once
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or twice a month,
whereas
every day and never represented the smallest proportions.
On the other hand
, there are fluctuations between several times a
week
, once a
week
and once or twice a
week
.In 2013, the frequency of once or twice a month increased was close to 35%, which exceeded that of once a
week
for the first time, becoming the most frequent in that year. Over the following ten years,
however
, the figure for people who either ate in fast food restaurants every day or never stood at under 5%.
While the
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number of Americans
ate
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in fast food restaurants several times a
week
stood at about 17% at
first,
and
then
it rose to 20% but
finally
dropped to the lowest point in 2013. Meanwhile, we can see that the number of a few times a year was approximately only 13 at
first,
but reached a peak of 15% after 2006.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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