In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this? What can be done about this problem?
Except for manufacturing
food
by cultivation, most of the population on the earth is still starving. In this
essay I elaborate my take on this
case by means of my experiences and solutions can be given.
Food
is a basic need of a man and it affects the development of both physical and mental well-being. Agriculture is the main source of food
production
and farmers are the kings in this
field. But,in the present society, farmers have faced lots of problems such
as weather, economy and human resources as well. As an example, due to
heavy rain in Sri Lanka last
few months ago,there was flooding for more than two to three weeks. As a result
, their main cultivation crops of faddy flattened and were unable to be restored. Additionally
, their vegetable farms rottened due to
heavy rain. So their main food
dish of rice and curry production
is unbelievably down and no more options as it is an island. Furthermore
, result of this
downtime in the last
few years and also
a lack of government support younger generation abandoned Agriculture.
However
, a small decision can change the whole structure and the redevelopment. First of all, a responsible government should construct well-planned and maintained food
stores and a safe transport system. Accordingly
, farmers are able to store their extra production
and minimise the destruction while
on the way to transport. After all, they need to develop their irrigation system and well-developed system for storage of rainwater for the dry season. Thereafter
, people educate and encourage new growing methods and modern technology for farming. So,the younger generation is also
motivated by the farm field.
In a nutshell, well-planned and maintained technological sharing helps the future protection of the airfield. My take on this
is to develop education,
and facilities for the Remove the comma
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food
production
field to minimise the starving all around the earth.Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore.
According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible.
Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities.
In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries.
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