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The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town
The given map demonstrates the plan of a proposed new
city
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. The
city
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 is obviously divided
in to
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 2 sections including: urban
area
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 and rural
area
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.
This
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 plan
also
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 reviews accommodation
areas
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 and facilities
such
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 as
an
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industry or transportation. It is evident from the map that in an urban
area
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, there is the
city
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center
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centre
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 located outside the
square
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area
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 and
be
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is
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 divided from rural
areas
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 by a
free way
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freeway
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.
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City
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The city
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center
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centre
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 be categorized
in to
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into
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 5 parts
which
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and
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 the 2 lower sections located in
southern
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the southern
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 have many recreational
areas
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. There is
the
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a
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square
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area
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 in the
center
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 of
this
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 map
which
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where
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 we can encounter transportation like parking car
areas
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 and bus stops. There are 3 parking in 3 corners of the
square
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area
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 and 2 bus stations near Parkings.
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, there are 4 roads in the
square
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area
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 and 9 roads connecting rural
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area
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areas
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 with urban
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area
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areas
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 which is one of
facilities
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the facilities
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 for the population who live in rural
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area
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areas
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. Looking at the outside of the
free way
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freeway
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, there is a rural
area
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 which
have
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has
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 2 industries located at northwest and southeast of the town. From my aspect, I think they have
planed
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planned
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 a a new town like
this
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 in order to prevent
a
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health care and pollution problems. There are many accommodation
areas
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 speared in every corner of the rural
area
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.
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, The largest recreational
area
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 is located in the north of rural
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area
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areas
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 too.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area, areas, square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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