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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares how five different countries producing
films
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 varied in three distinctive
years
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: 2007, 2008, and 2009.
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, there was an upward tendency in the numbers of
films
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 of B, C, and E produced in the examined
years
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,
while
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 the opposite trend was true for the two remaining countries.
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,
country
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 A accounted for the largest proportion of film production, and the
last
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 rank was for
country
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 E in all three
years
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. Countries that experienced an increase had B, constituting around 50
films
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 produced in 2007 and 2008,
then
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 dramatically surging up to 70
films
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 in the
last
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 year.
A considerable
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 growth was
also
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 witnessed in C, ranging from nearly 10
films
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 in 2007 to around 20
films
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 in 2009, approximately 3 times lower compared to the figure of B. E indicated a stable movement of just around 10
films
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 in all three
years
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, hitting a bottom of film production in 2 later
years
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. 2007 and 2008 were the most thriving
years
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 of
country
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 A when creating about 88
films
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 a year, positioning at the first rank, before experiencing a slight decrease to 80
films
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 in 2009. In terms of
country
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 D, 2007 had 15
films
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, 5 units higher than that figure of 2008, in the year 2009,
country
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 D experienced almost the same number of
films
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 as in 2007 but a bit lower.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, years, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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