The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years.

The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years.
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The pie charts compare various accommodation types in terms of popularity among tourists in three different
years
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namely 1988, 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, the most popular choice of accommodation among tourists is —> was staying with a host family.
However
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,
this
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tendency declined after 20
years
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,
whereas
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staying in a hotel, renting an apartment, and camping became more popular. In 1988, more than half of vacationers preferred staying with a host family, which was twice as popular as camping, chosen by just over a quarter of
travelers
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travellers
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. Hotels and
apartment
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apartments
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were even less favored, with
figure
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figures
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of 15% and 7%, respectively. Ten
years
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later, far fewer tourists opt to stay in a tent, as the figure halved to just 13%.
By contrast
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, the other types of lodging saw an increase in popularity, most noticeably hotels, attracting 7% more vacationers. Over the following 10
years
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,
while
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the figures
of
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for
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hotels and camping remained relatively stable,
this
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is not the case for the other accommodation choice. Specifically, the proportion of holidaymakers
rented
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who rented
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apartments doubled
at
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to
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22%,
whereas
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the percentage of those
chose
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who chose
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to stay with a host family decreased by a tenth.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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