Some people think that education should be free for all. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some individuals argue that schooling has to be totally free,
while
others say students have to buy fees
for their education
to improve their country
's economy. Although
fees
for learning will improve the education
quality, I believe pupils should study for free because later on they will be involved in the country
's development.
On the one hand, buying fees
to study is essential to increase the country
's economy, which will lead the government to fund each school for development. Moreover
, this
way will make students focus on their studies, so they will have great marks and after they graduate they will have many job opportunities. For example
, a recent research found that when schools had fees
this
reflected in the country
's development because their income increased and they could fund many sectors. However
, In my opinion, not everyone has money to buy for learning and that is
unfair to pupils who want to complete their school.
On the other hand
, learning has to be completely free for students in all schools primary, secondary and higher education
, because studying is one of human rights and people should have similar access to education
without any charge. Besides
, when they complete their degrees, they will participate in the country
's improvement. For instance
, the number of university graduates increasing and they have a rule for improving their society.
In conclusion, although
buying for learning has a huge effect in the country
, studying is essential for each one in society and it should be provided without any money.Submitted by saja.alotaibi on
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task achievement
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- The writer addresses both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
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- The conclusion summarizes the main points and restates the writer's opinion, which adds to the overall coherence.