The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.
The diagrams below
compares
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the
amount
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of buses which
incoming
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on time and
lamentation
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the lamentation
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of passengers from 1999 to 2003.
Overall
, during
this
five - year
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period, in 1999 remained the biggest indicator with 85% and 86%
in
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arriving on time, with all other times of service. In 2000 there was
sharp
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drop from 85% to 82%,
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was the lowest index in
first
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chart.
However
, the degree become increasing and was stable to the end of 2003
with
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85%. It is interesting to note that
in
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the beginning of
target
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was stable
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86%,
while
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started to decrease,
also
only in 2003 target index was lower than
actual
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. As can be seen from the second diagram, was number of complaints in the beginning was
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amount of appeal and each year was increased. In the 2003 was the biggest displeasure people was 120 from 1000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punctuality
  • target versus actual performance
  • correlation
  • consistency
  • trends
  • passenger numbers
  • complaints
  • assessment
  • measures taken
  • impact
  • effectiveness
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