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In the future, nobody will buy printed books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In times ahead the sales of printed
books
 are expected to decrease
whereas
 the number of
internet
 users will increase. Most people will be able to read their favourite topics online for free.
However
, in underdeveloped countries like Pakistan where teaching method in schools is not digitalized, printed
books
 will still be in demand. One would think that in developed countries like Australia where digital methods of teaching are practised at school, the demand for printed
books
 will slightly go down. Students in
such
 schools will have the option of moving to online studies as they would have access to laptops and the
internet
 in
classrooms
. Yet, free online studies have a drawback too, they create many distractions for students
due to
 the presence of a lot of irrelevant content. To make tuition hours more effective in
classrooms
 even developed countries would prefer printed
books
 for students. I foresee the usage of the
internet
 for reading purposes to increase in future but I do not foresee people completely stopping printed
books
 purchases. People fond of reading outside
classrooms
 might start reading free online content on the
internet
 but inside the
classrooms
, courses will be taught on printed
books
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conclusion
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task achievement
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coherence
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clarity
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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