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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to leam this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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dissertation
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thesis
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dealing
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subject
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point
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view
essay
, an analytic, interpretative, or critical literary
composition
usually
Add a missing verb
is usually
show examples
 much shorter and less systematic and formal than a
dissertation
 or
thesis
 and usually
dealing
Wrong verb form
deals
show examples
 with its
subject
 from a limited and often personal
point
 of
view
essay
, an analytic, interpretative, or critical literary
composition
usually
Add a missing verb
is usually
show examples
 much shorter and less systematic and formal than a
dissertation
 or
thesis
 and usually
dealing
Wrong verb form
deals
show examples
 with its
subject
 from a limited and often personal
point
 of
view
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task achievement
Your essay should be more than a definition. Expand on the topic by discussing both views and providing your own opinion.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your arguments. This strengthens your task response.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay by organizing it into structured paragraphs. Each paragraph should cover a single main point that is directly related to the topic.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction that presents the topic and a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoints.
task achievement
Your definitions of the essay are clear and accurate.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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