The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of Use synonyms
participants
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of
five activities at a particular social centre in Melbourne for twenty years from 2000 to 2020. Change preposition
in
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
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film
Correct article usage
the film
club
had the highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
participants
every year, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
number
of those who participated in table tennis experienced the highest increase throughout the period, compared to the other activities.
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According to
the data, in 2000, there were approximately 65 Linking Words
people
becoming a member of Use synonyms
Use synonyms
film
Add an article
the film
club
, making it Use synonyms
as
the Change preposition
apply
club
with the highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
participants
, Use synonyms
while
the remaining activities, like martial arts, amateur dramatics, and table tennis, had below 40 Linking Words
participants
at that time. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, ten years later, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
participants
Use synonyms
of
each Change preposition
in
club
relatively remained stable. Use synonyms
However
, there was a new group of musical performances in 2005 and it had 10 Linking Words
participants
in 2010.
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Moreover
, until 2020, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
people
who joined Use synonyms
Use synonyms
film
Correct article usage
the film
club
remained unchanged at around 65 Use synonyms
people
and it Use synonyms
become
the Wrong verb form
became
club
with the highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
participants
consistently every year. The Use synonyms
number
of attendees of Use synonyms
martial
arts Correct article usage
the martial
club
and music Use synonyms
club
Use synonyms
also
stayed the same during the period, Linking Words
although
not as much as the members of the Linking Words
film
Use synonyms
club
, at around 35 and 15 Use synonyms
people
, respectively. Use synonyms
In contrast
, there was a significant increase in the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
participants
in Use synonyms
table
tennis Add an article
the table
club
, from around 20 Use synonyms
people
in 2010, the Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
people
reached its peak Use synonyms
to
around 55 Change preposition
of
people
in 2020, making it Use synonyms
as
the Change preposition
apply
club
with the second highest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
participants
Use synonyms
at the end
of the period. Linking Words
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
number
of amateur dramatics Use synonyms
Use synonyms
club
experienced a decline to below 10 Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
people
in 2020, marking its lowest point and making it Use synonyms
as
the Change preposition
apply
club
with the least Use synonyms
member
during the year.Fix the agreement mistake
members
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