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Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the era of
globaliztion
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globalisation
, it is not
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challenging to
regconize
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recognise
 that environment which plays
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in our
lifes
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lives
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 faces the threat of destruction.
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 the issues, some argue that the most effective way to prevent
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 from happening is
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to rise
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rise
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raise
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 the price of gasoline. I assume that
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 action should be
caried
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carried
 out to protect our standard of living. On the one hand, an increase in the price of
fuel
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 is the way that the government should do to regulate emissions. The initial point is that
instead
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 of using their private vehicles, citizens are predicted to
ultilize
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utilise
public
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 transport system, resulting in
protecting
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natural
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 resources and
mitigate
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 the exhaust gas.
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 to the factor aforementioned, I
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 believe that changing the
fuel
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 price can raise awareness of those who
bear
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a
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 thought that natural resources can be exploited over-abuse.
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, people who do not have knowledge about environmental problems when gasoline
cost
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costs
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 increase will learn why
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 happens, thereby leading to more awareness
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 protecting natural resources.
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, if
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 action were not performed, global environmental problems
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 continue dramatically, leading to various detrimental effects on humans and animals’
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. The first ground for
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 is that
,
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the ultilizing
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ultilizing
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utilizing
 of
fuel
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 can produce air pollution, leading to reducing lung function and increasing the risk of respiratory infections of residents.
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, abusing oil refineries and the use of
fuel
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 in vehicles all release sulfur and nitrogen oxides into the atmosphere, causing
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acid deposition. These aspects are
inexricably
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inextricably
 linked to environmental issues and contribute significantly to the nation’s well-being. In conclusion, solving environmental problems by increasing
prices
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the prices
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 of fuels is the primary way. By
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 performance, citizens can build a sustainable environment and preserve
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air pollution
as well as
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 climate change.

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Your essay covers multiple aspects of the task, such as the impact of fuel price increases on emissions and public awareness, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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