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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts illustrate what
Anthropology
graduates
 did after graduation and depict the salaries of the anthropologists
in
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work
 after five years. The highest percentage of
anthropology
graduates
 had full-time
work
, compared with the lowest number of those choosing part-time
work
 with postgrad study. After 5
years'
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work
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, the salaries of over half of
Anthropology
graduates
 exceeded 75,000
dollar
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 in three types of employment. It is remarkable that 52% of
anthropology
graduates
 had full-time jobs, including working
in
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 freelance consultants
,
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government
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 sector and private companies. In both freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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 sector, around 80% of
salaries
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the salaries
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 of
anthropology
graduates
 after
5-year
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5 years of
work
 were over 75,000
dollar
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. In terms of those who earn 25,000
dollar
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 to 49,999
dollar
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, the percentages of
Anthropology
graduates
 who are
the
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freelance consultants are 5% and 15% respectively, which entirely equal the corresponding figure for the
anthropology
graduates
 who
work
 in
government
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the government
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 sector.
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 20% of
anthropology
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anthropology,
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graduates
 were not known or unemployed,
remaining
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the remaining
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 nearly 30% of those were in part-time
work
 or postgrad study. The figure of
anthropology
graduates
 having part-time
job
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jobs
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 was 20%,
while
 only 5% of them did not only part-time
work
 but postgrad study, being three times and
this
 was three times higher than the figure of only having part-time
work
.
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