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the table below shows the results of a survey of firs year stuedents taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspacts of their course 'very good'.

the table below shows the results of a survey of firs year stuedents taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspacts of their course 'very good'.
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The given table compares the percentage of
students
 satisfied with their different courses at a certain university.  
Overall
,
students
 studying commerce gave more
satisfaction
results
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 their courses,
while
students
 studying law and economics had lower
results
.  
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 the
university
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 of
economics
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, the highest rates of
satisfaction
as'very
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as ' very
 good' were for teaching quality and tutor support, 95% and 92%, respectively. Pre-course information and
resources
 (print) were quite similar, accounting for 55% and 59%,
while
 the rating for
resources
 (other) was a bit higher, at 62%.   Regarding
students
 at the law university, their highest indicator was 80% and 79% on
resources
 (other) and tutor support,
while
 the lowest showed only 67% for teaching quality.
Satisfaction
results
 for pre-course information were 72%, which is a bit higher than
resources
 (print), which is 70%.   As for
students
's
satisfaction
 in commerce, the highest
results
 were equal for pre-course information and teaching quality (95%). Tutor support
also
 ranked highly, with 93% of its respondents
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saying ' very
 good'. Meanwhile,
resources
 (other) ranked slightly lower at 86%.
While
 still high for
resources
 (print),
this
 is 5 percentage points lower than
resources
 (other).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, satisfaction, results, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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