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the table below shows the results of a survey of firs year stuedents taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspacts of their course 'very good'.

the table below shows the results of a survey of firs year stuedents taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspacts of their course 'very good'.
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The given table compares the percentage of
students
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 satisfied with their different courses at a certain university.  
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,
students
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 studying commerce gave more
satisfaction
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results
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to
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 their courses,
while
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students
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 studying law and economics had lower
results
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.  
In
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 the
university
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 of
economics
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Economics
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, the highest rates of
satisfaction
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as'very
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as ' very
 good' were for teaching quality and tutor support, 95% and 92%, respectively. Pre-course information and
resources
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 (print) were quite similar, accounting for 55% and 59%,
while
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 the rating for
resources
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 (other) was a bit higher, at 62%.   Regarding
students
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 at the law university, their highest indicator was 80% and 79% on
resources
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 (other) and tutor support,
while
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 the lowest showed only 67% for teaching quality.
Satisfaction
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results
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 for pre-course information were 72%, which is a bit higher than
resources
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 (print), which is 70%.   As for
students
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's
satisfaction
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 in commerce, the highest
results
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 were equal for pre-course information and teaching quality (95%). Tutor support
also
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 ranked highly, with 93% of its respondents
saying'very
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saying ' very
 good'. Meanwhile,
resources
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 (other) ranked slightly lower at 86%.
While
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 still high for
resources
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 (print),
this
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 is 5 percentage points lower than
resources
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 (other).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, satisfaction, results, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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