IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #leaders #leadership #skills
The view that people believe good leadership is naturally born with others
also
 thinking it is a skill that can be learned has raised a lot of arguments.
This
 essay will discuss both views and provide detailed reasons as to why I stand with the former
statement
Change noun form
statement's
show examples
 positive views on the impact brought by inborn guardianship
thus
 to the community, workplace, and certain sectors to a greater extent.
Firstly
, individuals who are born with good captaincy abilities are certain to achieve their goals without any hardships as they can operate naturally with wisdom , ambition, integrity and at a good pace. Fortunately, they can attain their objective,
for instance
, in years gone by there was no educational empowerment yet we had powerful leaders
such
 as Mzilikazi who was the leader of ZAPU Institute in Zimbabwe who ruled with serenity, love, empathy and vision to his followers.
Secondly
, the one who is to lead must be taught how to handle people, and drawbacks and how to nurture the gift to reduce errors.
For example
, in modern days there are plenty of programs of studies which combine short and long training courses to attain
further
 traits,
such
 organisations to illustrate, include Ethos which the former President of the United States Barrack Obama
also
 takes part in. In conclusion,
while
 it can be argumentative that leadership is something that has to be learnt,
however
,
this
 comparison bares more benefits on leading being an innate thing,
such
 as there's wisdom on inborn captainship abilities and certain mistakes being minimised irrespectively,
therefore
, l stand with the former statement.
Submitted by teterayithelma on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Strengthen the introduction by clearly defining the topic and the scope of the essay. Mention both views explicitly in a sentence before stating your stance.
task achievement
Provide more balanced discussion for both points of view before concluding your stance. This ensures the essay addresses both perspectives adequately.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point to avoid confusion. This helps in making each argument clearer and more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between sentences and paragraphs to enhance the logical flow. This makes it easier for the reader to follow your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Polish grammatical accuracy and vary sentence structures for better readability.
task achievement
Good use of relevant examples, such as referring to historical figures and modern-day training programs, which help illustrate points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Presence of an introduction and conclusion, which helps structure the essay and convey your stance.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: