The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems and what measures can be taken to solve this problem?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in immigrating people from the
countryside
to the urban areas for the sake of better job opportunities. In
this
essay, I intend to explore some of the significant challenges associated with
this
trend,
as well as
, present some alternatives to address
this
phenomenon. First of all, I believe that the most serious difficulty would be desolated
villages
as well as
the emergence of a booming population in
cities
. Having relocated to
cities
would encounter
cities
with a lack of housing to accommodate
such
a huge number of immigrants, contributing to the consequent difficulties
such
as inflation in house prices, homelessness, and low quality of life
as a result
. Simultaneously, inhibited
villages
would expose
such
places to a considerable lake of workforces for agriculture, resulting in an exponential decline in agricultural commodities and the recession of the agriculture industry in the long term.
Nonetheless
, governments could play an indisputable role in solving
this
issue. Of course, living in
cities
is accompanied by more convenience and wealth,
however
, I feel that offering financial incentives for immigrants to the
countryside
could reverse
this
trend and attract more families to adopt
villages
to live in.
For instance
, in Turkey, the government applied a 50% discount on medical and educational services to residents in
villages
in 2017, which caused an influx of people to the
countryside
. Importantly, rather than concentrating all facilities in urban areas, transferring some of them like recreational or educational facilities to the
countryside
could discourage people from relocating to
cities
. So, taking these policies could alleviate those negative implications. By way of conclusion, I reckon that
although
this
phenomenon is unlikely to be resolved in the foreseeable future, taking the mentioned measures has the potential to bring the population balance back to both urban and rural areas.
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