Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why somone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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İt is argued by people to
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of
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a new
language
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one
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hand, some individuals believe that
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aim
for learn
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of learning
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a new
language
is
travel
or job
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opportunities
. On
other
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hand, some individuals believe that
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this
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only reason to learn a new
language
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essay will explain both
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of the argument. Being a
multilangual
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multilingual
person rather than
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the monolingual
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person must have very advantages for our
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lives
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. I think
,
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it is true that
learn
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a new lingual skills
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new lingual skills
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rather than native literacy
mostly
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is mostly
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for job
oppurtinity
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opportunities
and
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another countries
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in the world. To support that,
this
goal may have contributed
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percentage of
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the reason
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to be a
multilangual
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multilingual
.
However
,
experiment
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the experiment
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shows that learning a new
language
has an incredible impact on the brain. Some individuals learn a new
language
for brain gymnastics.
In addition
, the
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world
has
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more multicultural and technology has been
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improving
fastly. Many people chat from their
home
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. Some people may have chosen
has
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to have
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an international friend
instead
of working
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in at
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at
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a
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foreign country or
travel
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travelling
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. In Turkey, some private primary school pupils
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have
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a "letter friend" to foreign
country
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countries
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.
This
children
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is only 8-10 years old. İt is not for a job or
travel
, it is just for some fun and support their logical development. In conclusion, I think the final aim may
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be to move
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a
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to a
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foreing
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foreign
country or
travel
, but it is not the only reason for
learn
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learning
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a new
language
.
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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that each point is fully developed with detailed examples and explanations. For instance, you could discuss how learning a new language could help someone appreciate different cultures or enhance cognitive abilities with more depth.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, work on creating smoother transitions between points. For example, use phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In contrast,' or 'As a result' to connect your ideas more fluidly.
coherence cohesion
Correct spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'oppurtinities' should be 'opportunities', 'tis' should be 'this', 'worl' should be 'world', and 'improrivng' should be 'improving'.
coherence cohesion
The essay's introduction and conclusion provide a good framework for discussing the topic, making the structure clear.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed both sides of the argument, demonstrating an understanding of different perspectives.
task achievement
Including specific examples, such as the practice in Turkish primary schools, gives your essay more substance and relevance.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conversational fluency
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cultural immersion
  • bilingual/multilingual
  • cognitive enhancement
  • cross-cultural communication
  • globalized world
  • economic marketplace
  • language acquisition
  • educational advancement
  • social integration
  • cultural empathy
  • international diplomacy
  • intellectual growth
  • language barriers
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