The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

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two

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charts, the bar

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depicts

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companies estimated sales in Turkey of Jeans for next year.

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the pie

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shows the

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companies projected market share of Jeans

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of next year. It is clear from the graph that sales fluctuate.

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what is shown on the bar

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, I see that Jack and Jones

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. have the largest proportion than Mango

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. Both peaks in December.

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they have the lowest in February.

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in July and August, Mango

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. jumps and overcomes Jack and Jones

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. Moving on, on the pie

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which shows the

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companies projected market share of Jeans

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of next year comparing it to the bar

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it appears that Mango

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. has the largest proportion at about 50 per cent. Comes directly after it is Jack and Jones

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. with 30 per cent . Others are the lowest with 20 per cent.

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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernize, old buildings are demolished and replaces with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old building? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The crime nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance in technology which can help prevent and solve crime.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to observations, some animal species have become extinct or endangered in recent decades. What are reasons behind this tendency? What effects it may have on ecosystem in general?

QUESTIONS: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.