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Complain to the Mayor about a dangerous road in your neighbourhood.

#mayor #road #neighbourhood
Dear Mayor, I am contacting you because of the bad condition of the roads in my
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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.
This
road
 is becoming more and more dangerous for drivers and pedestrians and I believe immediate action is needed to address
this
 situation.I believe that you will solve
this
problem
 positively and
that is
 why I am contacting you. The main
problem
 is the poor condition of the
road
 surface. Potholes and cracks on the
road
 cause many accidents. Apart from the condition of the
road
, the poor street lighting and the lack of
road
 signs are causing many problems. Especially at night, the ability to see is greatly reduced and it is very dangerous for young children and the elderly. To solve
this
problem
, I propose to allocate the necessary amount of money from the district budget and
then
 repair the
road
 and
road
 lights. I hope you will pay attention to
this
problem
 and solve it positively.
King
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Kind
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 regards, Khurshidbek Umedov
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general
Improve the clarity by organizing your sentences and adding a little more detail to illustrate the points. For instance, explain specific incidents caused by the dangerous road or cite complaints from other residents, if possible.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the content into more paragraphs. One paragraph can address the road condition, another can tackle the street lighting and signage issues, and a concluding paragraph can summarize your request and reiterate the call to action.
general
Ensure proper greetings and ending salutations, such as 'Best regards,' instead of 'King regards'.
task response
The letter clearly identifies the problem and proposes a solution, which shows good task achievement.
coherence
The ideas are clearly presented and logically structured, making it easy to follow.
general
The language used is polite and formal, which is appropriate for a letter to the mayor.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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