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Band 4.5

Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resourches rather than reycle more To what extent do you agree with the statement?

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is
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 pivotal for everyone; they can
use
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it
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 encouraged rather than recycle more. I support the statement since
wood
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 and
water
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 are beneficial for
people
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 in the world, so
people
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 can
use
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it
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 with caution.
Firstly
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,
wood
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 sources
is
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 essential nowadays because most
people
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 and companies are doing illegal logging,
for
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example
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 deforestation occurs everywhere
,
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apply
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 after they have down, they do not conservation
,
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 so that it will extinct the material if the company or government
one
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making
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 paper for
public
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the public
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.
Consequently
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,
book
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books
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 and materials made from
wood
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 will be difficult to obtain.
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, the
authority
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authorities
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need
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 make some
regulation
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regulations
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 to tackle
people
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 doing illegal logging, it is the best way
declined
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people
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 used
wood
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 for specific
perpose
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purpose
purposes
.
Secondly
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,
water
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 is crucial today.
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, many countries have less
of
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water
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 since the
consuming
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 is over,
for
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instance
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 industry and household
using
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 need to
control
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 by society. it can avoid excessive
water
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use
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. The government require
to
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socialization to overcome
the
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problems,
such
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make
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making
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 new
regulation
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regulations
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are
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 maximal
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use
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 every stakeholder
likewise
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 industry and family members because it will overcome
lack
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the lack
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 of
water
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, and if the government
want
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 make clean
water
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, they need
much
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 money to invest.
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, it is the best solution for
solve
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lack
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the lack
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 of
water
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 in
the
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society.
To sum up
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,
to
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use
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 fewer resources
wood
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 and
water
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are
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 essential compared to recycling more
,
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 because it needs conservation for
long
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a long
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 time
especially
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wood
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.
Then
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water
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 requires more money to clean
water
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 facilities. I agree
about
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 the statement since it can be overcome using material more in the citizen.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay by ensuring a smooth flow of ideas and clear connections between paragraphs and sentences. For example, using transition phrases like 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'On the other hand' can help create a more coherent text.
task achievement
Focus on providing more relevant and specific examples to support your main points. Ensure that each example is directly linked to the argument you are presenting.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and outline the main points of the essay, providing a clear response to the question.
task achievement
The essay addresses both the use of wood and water as resources, providing a comprehensive response to the task prompt.
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