Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resourches rather than reycle more To what extent do you agree with the statement?
Resources
is
pivotal for everyone; they can Change the verb form
are
use
it
encouraged rather than recycle more. I support the statement since Correct pronoun usage
them
wood
and water
are beneficial for people
in the world, so people
can use
it
with caution.
Correct pronoun usage
them
Firstly
, wood
sources is
essential nowadays because most Change the verb form
are
people
and companies are doing illegal logging, for
example
deforestation occurs everywhereAdd a comma
example,
,
after they have down, they do not conservationRemove the comma
apply
,
so that it will extinct the material if the company or government Remove the comma
apply
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
making
paper for Wrong verb form
makes
public
. Add an article
the public
Consequently
, book
and materials made from Fix the agreement mistake
books
wood
will be difficult to obtain. However
, the authority
Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
need
make some Add the particle
need to
regulation
to tackle Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
people
doing illegal logging, it is the best way declined
Verb problem
to prevent
people
used wood
for specific perpose
.
Correct your spelling
purpose
purposes
Secondly
, water
is crucial today. However
, many countries have less of
Change preposition
apply
water
since the consuming
is over, Replace the word
consumption
for
instance
industry and household Add a comma
instance,
using
need to Replace the word
use
control
by society. it can avoid excessive Wrong verb form
be controlled
water
use
. The government require to
socialization to overcome Change preposition
apply
the
problems, Correct article usage
apply
such
as make
new Wrong verb form
making
regulation
Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
are
maximal Correct pronoun usage
that are
use
every stakeholder Fix the infinitive
to use
likewise
industry and family members because it will overcome lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
water
, and if the government want
make clean Add the particle
want to
water
, they need much
money to invest. Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
As a result
, it is the best solution for solve
Change the verb form
solving
lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
water
in the
society.
Correct article usage
apply
To sum up
, to
Change the verb form
using
use
fewer resources wood
and water
are
essential compared to recycling moreCorrect subject-verb agreement
is
,
because it needs conservation for Remove the comma
apply
long
time Add an article
a long
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
wood
. Then
water
requires more money to clean water
facilities. I agree about
the statement since it can be overcome using material more in the citizen.Change preposition
with
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay by ensuring a smooth flow of ideas and clear connections between paragraphs and sentences. For example, using transition phrases like 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'On the other hand' can help create a more coherent text.
task achievement
Focus on providing more relevant and specific examples to support your main points. Ensure that each example is directly linked to the argument you are presenting.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and outline the main points of the essay, providing a clear response to the question.
task achievement
The essay addresses both the use of wood and water as resources, providing a comprehensive response to the task prompt.