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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new market is planned for the town. The map two possible sites for the supermarket.

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The map below is of the urban of Garlsdon. A new grocery store is expected for the city. The map shows two alternative sites for the grocery store.
Overall
, it is evident that the future design is considering two distinct
district
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. The first option is located in the countryside,
while
second
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the second
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 and opted for the urban area
center
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 with foot traffic. The first site is on the southwest side of the urban area. In
this
 case , the supermarket would be located in the rural not far from an industrial area . The grocery store would
between
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 the railway and
main
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the main
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 road. Hindon , which has a population of about twelve km
Garlsdon
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from Garlsdon
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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear and concise introduction and conclusion. This will help in summarizing your main points effectively and give your essay a structured feel.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your ideas flow logically from one to another. Use linking phrases and transitional words to achieve better coherence.
task achievement
Expand your points with more detailed explanations and relevant examples to improve task achievement and provide a comprehensive response to the task.
task achievement
Ensure you cover both locations in equal measure, discussing the pros and cons objectively to give a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Your overall structure is on the right path; separation of the two possible sites makes it easier to follow.
task achievement
You have made an effort to address the task by describing the locations of the two sites for the supermarket.

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