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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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[The pie chart illustrates the allocation of funds for different sectors in
United
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the United
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 Arab Emirates in the year 2000 from their total budget of 315 billion Arab Emirate
dollars
.
Overall
,
while
 the majority of significance was given
for
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to
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the
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social security, the allocation
funds
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of funds
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 for the transport system was
least
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the least
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.
Similarly
,
a
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an
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 equal proportion of expenditure was borne for
defense
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defence
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,debit interest payments and other expenditures. When looking at the given data, it is conspicuous that
remarkably
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 high amount of money was invested to ensure
the
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social safety by delegating nearly
a
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one third
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one-third
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 of
total
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the total
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 budget (100 billion
dolars
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dollars
).Approximately,
a
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half of that was used for help personal and social services.In the same way, the money expended for the purposes of
defense
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defence
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, debit interest and other functions were the same, accounting
23
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for 23
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, 23 and 22
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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Arabic
dollars
rerespectively
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respectively
. In the means of law and order, Arabs deligated 17
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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dollars
 from their main budget.
In addition
, for
the
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industrial agricultural and employment purposes and housing heritage and environmental projects,
Arabian
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the Arabian
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 government invested 13
billions
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billion
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 and 15
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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dollars
. Eventually, it is
lucid
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clear
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 that
transportation
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the transportation
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 system was funded by the lowest amount of 9 billion Arabic
dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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