IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#bar #show #information #students #four #countries #summarise #features #comparisons
The following bar chart showcases the number of
students
 pursuing education in four English-speaking nations in the years 2004 and 2012.
Similarly
, the table showcases the aggregate proportion of international
students
 in those countries.
Overall
, it can be observed that all the countries experienced a surge in the admissions of international
students
. The USA remains the top choice for
students
while
 Canada at the lowest. Talking about numbers, in 2004, the USA had slightly above 150 foreign
students
 but that figure rose to nearly 250 in 2012. The UK and Australia witnessed a similar trend, both of them had more than 100
students
 in 2004 and almost 200 in 2012. Canada remained lowest compared to its rivals, its number remaining steady at nearly 50
students
. In 2012, the proportion of foreign
students
 remained highest in Australia at exactly 24%, meanwhile, the UK trailed behind at 13%.
However
, Surprisingly USA had the lowest share of foreign
students
 compared to the total
students
 at 2% only,
although
 it had the highest number of foreign
students
 enrolled.
Submitted by shahroz99dev on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: