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The diagram below shows the floor of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The flow chart illustrates the underground plan of a public
library
 20 years ago and
current
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the current
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 looks
today
.
Overall
, the central
library
 20 years ago and current looks has many changes and some similarities or no demolishing.
Such
 as the children's
books
room
,
adult
 non-fiction
books
 enquiry desk, reading
room
and
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apply
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ect
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etc
.
To begin
 with, way back
2004
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in 2004
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 there were tables and chairs in the centre of the
library
, which
today
 it has been taken off. Again, at the
south -east
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south-east
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part
 of the
library
 there was
enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk( tickets, book returns etc) with no entrance, but as of
today
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today,
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 there has been demolition and
reconstructed
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reconstruction
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 with
door
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a door
the door
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 on the left side of the cafe. On the eastern
part
 of the
library
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library,
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 there
was
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were
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adult
 non-fiction
books
however
, the place has been rebuilt with
adult
 fiction
books
,
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and, information
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information
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an information
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 desk with three
self -service
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self-service
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 machines. The children's
books
room
 has been changed to
lecture
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a lecture
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room
 and the
door
 was maintained.
Additionally
,
at
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in
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 the
south -west
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south-west
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part
 of the
library
 there
were
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was
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reading
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a reading
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room
 (newspapers and magazines) and the
door
 was facing
the
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apply
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north, but it
has been
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was
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 changed into
computer
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a computer
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room
 with the
door
 opposite the cafe. The
adult
 fiction
books
was
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were
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 larger than
today
's own and
has
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have
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 been changed to all reference
books
. The CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games
room
 has been demolished and reconstructed with
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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 in size added with two sofas. The place is now storytelling events and children's fiction
books
. The
door
 facing the southern
part
 of the
library
 was maintained.
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