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The diagram below shows the floor of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The flow chart illustrates the underground plan of a public
library
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 20 years ago and
current
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the current
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 looks
today
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.
Overall
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, the central
library
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 20 years ago and current looks has many changes and some similarities or no demolishing.
Such
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 as the children's
books
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room
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,
adult
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 non-fiction
books
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 enquiry desk, reading
room
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and
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apply
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ect
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etc
.
To begin
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 with, way back
2004
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in 2004
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 there were tables and chairs in the centre of the
library
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, which
today
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 it has been taken off. Again, at the
south -east
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south-east
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part
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 of the
library
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 there was
enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk( tickets, book returns etc) with no entrance, but as of
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today
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today,
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 there has been demolition and
reconstructed
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reconstruction
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 with
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door
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a door
the door
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 on the left side of the cafe. On the eastern
part
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 of the
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library
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library,
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 there
was
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were
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adult
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 non-fiction
books
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however
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, the place has been rebuilt with
adult
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 fiction
books
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,
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and, information
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information
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an information
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 desk with three
self -service
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self-service
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 machines. The children's
books
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room
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 has been changed to
lecture
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a lecture
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room
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 and the
door
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 was maintained.
Additionally
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,
at
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in
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 the
south -west
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south-west
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part
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 of the
library
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 there
were
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was
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reading
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a reading
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room
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 (newspapers and magazines) and the
door
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 was facing
the
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apply
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north, but it
has been
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was
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 changed into
computer
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a computer
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room
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 with the
door
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 opposite the cafe. The
adult
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 fiction
books
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was
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were
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 larger than
today
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's own and
has
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have
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 been changed to all reference
books
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. The CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games
room
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 has been demolished and reconstructed with
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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 in size added with two sofas. The place is now storytelling events and children's fiction
books
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. The
door
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 facing the southern
part
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 of the
library
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 was maintained.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, today, books, room, adult, part, door with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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