The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the annual
sales
of movies in various formats, including rentals, VHS, DVD and
blu-ray
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Blu-ray
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, in a specific shop from 2002 to 2011. 
Overall
, it can be seen that rentals and DVD
sales
had
high
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a high
show examples
volume of
sales
while
VHS
sales
and
blu-ray
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Blu-ray
show examples
sales
had
Verb problem
did
show examples
not show a significant number of
sales
. There was a downward trend of rentals over
time
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the time
a time
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period,
started
Wrong verb form
starting
show examples
at 185,000
units
by 2002 and consistently
decreased
Wrong verb form
decreasing
show examples
around 58,000
units
by 2011. Meanwhile,
blu-ray
Correct article usage
the blu-ray
show examples
format started at just under 50,000
units
by 2002 and reached
the
Correct article usage
a
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peak at 215,000
units
by 2007 before
droped
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dropped
to 180,000 by 2011. VHS format showed a minimal number of
sales
at around 85,000
unit
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units
show examples
by 2002 and continually fell to 0 by 2006 and the following years. After 2007,
blu-ray
which
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apply
show examples
began to
sales had
Wrong verb form
have
show examples
a slight increase
of
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in
show examples
sales
at around 2,000
units
and increased minimally to just over 10,000
units
by 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, blu-ray, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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