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The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart and pie charts illustrate data about how many men and women were educated in five various age
classification
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classifications
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 in
Glasgow
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 in 2010. It can be clearly seen that the highest level of education was
at
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a
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University
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degree
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 in
Glasgow
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.
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However
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 the lowest amount of education
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degree
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degrees
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 was for
people
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 who were not qualified in
Glasgow
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 over the period. In 2010,the percentage of community who were educated at the
University
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 was %76 with
ages
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 between 24 and 35
years
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 old in
Glasgow
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.(Which was the highest level of education
degree
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 over the period).
While
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,the number of men and women who had
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University
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a University
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degree
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 was
at
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32
%32 and %29 in
Glasgow
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,respectively.
Moreover
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,the percentage of
people
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 who studied at the
University
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 with
ages
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 16-24
years
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 old was the same as the populations with
ages
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 between 35-50
years
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 old at %71 in
Glasgow
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 in 2010.
In contrast
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,the proportion of
people
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 who were not educated and were more than 75
years
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 old was %72 in
Glasgow
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 which comprised %38
by
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apply
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females and %35
by
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apply
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males in 2010.(Which was the lowest level of learning grade over the whole year).
In addition
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,only 3
percent
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per cent
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 of elderly
people
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 in
ages
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 +75
years
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 old had
school
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a school
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 certificate in
Glasgow
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 in 2010.Surprisingly,the percentage of men who were
teached
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taught
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 in the school was the same as women at %33 in
Glasgow
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glasgow, university, degree, people, ages, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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