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A lot of people nowadays are spending too much money and they don’t save anything for future use. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Introduction
Most
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communities
communites
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communities
 nowadays are
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using a lot
useing alot
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using a lot
mounts
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amounts
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 of
money
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 and they
dont
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do not
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 save
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anything
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any thing
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anything
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 for the
future
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.
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This
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 sources can lead to
poor
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a poor
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life
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 which can caused from own choices .
Body paragraph 1
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This
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 habits affect mostly
the
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apply
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younger people
baucose
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barcode
 they can't hold any
money
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 in their
bacet
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bank
for example
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 if they see anything
in
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online they will
eventally
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eventually
bought
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buy
be bought
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 it without even
think
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thinking
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 about it.
This
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is
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will affect badly in their
future
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life
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 when they have
besy
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busy
best
life
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 and
depands
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demands
depends
 to do
this
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 the time that they will regret
about
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every penny that they
spand
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spend
in
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on
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 boring stuff.
Body paragraph 2
Honestly
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 not
every one
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everyone
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 will think about their
future
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 and the big
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damage
 that they will face. So in my own
situation
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i
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I
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 always
not put the save thing
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take saving
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 seriously so when
i
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I
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 visit
other
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another
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 country and
i
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I
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 dont have any
saving
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savings
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i
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I
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 spend the whole adventure without any fun and little opportunities which
made
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makes
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 my trip hard.
while
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 the person
whose
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who
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save
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saves
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 lots
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money
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of money
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 from the biggening will made their
life
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 much easily to live.
Conclusion
To
conclode
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conclude
, every penny that we put
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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side
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aside
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 without
spend
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spending
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 it now will make our
life
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 in the
future
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more diffrent
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different
 and it will
benfits
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benefit
benefits
 us
alot
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a lot
. So that
i
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I
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recommended
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recommend
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 every teenager start
from
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apply
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now
to save
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by saving
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 every single
money
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 they have to make their
life
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 preferable.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic instability
  • financial trouble
  • emergencies
  • economic downturns
  • financial security
  • long-term goals
  • higher education
  • retiring comfortably
  • paycheck to paycheck
  • stress and anxiety
  • mental health
  • stimulate the economy
  • generate employment
  • business growth
  • debt accumulation
  • consumerism culture
  • material goods
  • personal development
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