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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear sir, I am Navneet Kaur, I am writing
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 letter to express my interest in working at the main branch office which is located in California, U.S. I have been promoted to the post of manager recently,
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, I want to learn some more tricks and strategies to manage my team and increase the sales of our product in the global market. I assure you that my work won’t be affected in any way till the time I am away because I will be attending some relentlessly vital meetings online and the left-over task will be completed by the assistant manager Mr. Adam. He is going to keep me updated with all the necessary details. I would be obliged if you could arrange my visit and accommodation in the
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 for six months. I hope to polish my skills to take the company to new heights by devoting my efforts to achieving new targets and lucrative profits. I hope you take my opinion into consideration. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.

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task achievement
In the first paragraph, consider being more specific about what you hope to achieve by working at the head office, such as learning specific management or sales techniques. This will provide a clearer idea of your objectives.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea. For example, discussing your assistant manager's role in your absence could be expanded for more detail.
task achievement
The letter clearly explains your wish to work at the head office and outlines the impact on your current work. This makes your intent clear to the reader.
coherence cohesion
The closing paragraph is strong, expressing optimism and reiterating your commitment to the company's success.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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