The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The map provides information concerning the existing and the development plan for the city centre. At first glance, it can
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seen that the current layout illustrates numerous parks,
while
the proposed future one represents extra facilities with underground parking. Starting with the current setup, North Avenue holds 2 parking areas with a movie theatre in between.
In contrast
, most of the functional buildings
such
as the exhibition, council offices, town hall, shopping centre, and
library
are located along Victoria Avenue from High Street to Smith Street respectively. Moving on to the proposal arrangement, there are additional facilities constructions like a cafe and hotel & restaurant ,since the car parks are replaced by the modern parking systems under the
library
and town hall.
Moreover
, there are size adjustments in the
library
and exhibition, the former shows larger in the new location with the basement garage appearing more convenient.
Whereas
, the latter depicts a smaller positioning in the old
library
position next to Smith Street.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Civic centre
  • Present
  • Plan
  • Comparison
  • Main features
  • Map
  • Summarize
  • Information
  • Report
  • Relevant
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