The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates the change
of
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the
number
of
visitors
traveling
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to a Caribbean
island
between
from
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2010 to 2017. The year witnessed more and more people
came
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to visit the
island
.
According to
the graph, the total
number
of
visitors
keep
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growing all the time. In 2010, 1
million
of
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tourists paid a visitor to the
island
,
then
the
number
keep
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kept
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rising and
reach
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reached
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1.5
million
in 2012.
Then
a jump can
been
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be
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seen in 2013 and 2014, reaching 2.0 and 2.5
million
. After that, the
number
stayed constant in 2016 and surged in 2017,
finally
reached
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reaching
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3.5
million
. As for
visitors
staying on cruise ships and staying on
island
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the island
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, the story is different. Though
two
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of them showed a trend of
increasement
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increase
, there are some differences between them. For the
visitors
staying on cruise ships, the
number
was 0.75
millions
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million
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in 2010 and 2011,
then
a slow climb can be seen in 2012 and 2013, reaching 1.5
million
. After that, the
numebr
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number
reached
the
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a
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plateau at 1.5 before a decline can be seen in 2016, decreased to 1.25
million
in 2016, and
finally
climb
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climbed
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up to 1.5
million
again in 2017. As for
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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, the
number
started at 0.25
million
in 2010,
then
it experienced
a
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increasement in 2010, reaching 0.5
million
and dropped to 0.25
million
again in 2012.
Then
the
number
kept increasing in the following years
,
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and
finally
reached 2
million
in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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