The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about different modes of transport used to travel to work in one city in three different years.
overall
, it can be clearly observed that the proportion using the
car
was the highest in the 2000 year.
while
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the bike was the lowest. to
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with the 2000 year the percentage using buses was approximately 15%.
While
the
car
it was increased dramatically by about 40%
then
plunged by around 5%.
in1980
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ratio
to
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buses,
car
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cars
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,
bike
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bikes
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,and for starting nearly 30%,25%,20%,
15
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and 15
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%, respectively.Transport modes in Europen city in 1960 the rates to foot was the highest almost 35%
however
, the
car
was decreased to 5%.
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