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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about different modes of transport used to travel to work in one city in three different years.
overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the proportion using the
car
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 was the highest in the 2000 year.
while
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,
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apply
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 the bike was the lowest. to
being
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begin
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 with the 2000 year the percentage using buses was approximately 15%.
While
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 the
car
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 it was increased dramatically by about 40%
then
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 plunged by around 5%.
in1980
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In in1980
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 ratio
to
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of
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 buses,
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car
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cars
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,
bike
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bikes
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,and for starting nearly 30%,25%,20%,
15
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and 15
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%, respectively.Transport modes in Europen city in 1960 the rates to foot was the highest almost 35%
however
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, the
car
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 was decreased to 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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