The graph gives information about male and female gym memberships between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph compares the number of members attending a
gym
based on gender from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, it is clear that
men
population was high. Correct your spelling
the male
However
it Add a comma
However,
was
diminished over time and the females were high in number by the end of the period.
In the year 1990, the gents attending the Unnecessary verb
apply
gym
were about 2000 in number. They were increased in the next five years after which their count was diminished and remained in a plateau till the end of the second decade. There was a rise in the male
Correct quantifier usage
number of male
gym
attenders for the next five years. In contrast
, they were
decreased rapidly after 2005 and Unnecessary verb
apply
finally
, only about 800 gents were participating in the gym
sessions in the year 2010.
With regards to the opposite gender, initially
, they constitute to
half of the male ones. Change preposition
apply
However
, in spite of various fluctuations their populaton
Correct your spelling
population
was
increased Unnecessary verb
apply
througout
the duration. By the end of the span, they were almost augmented by more than two times that of Correct your spelling
throughout
male
gender and were identical to the male Correct article usage
the male
gym
members in the year 1990.Submitted by sivaleelamahendra1214 on
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