Write a report with this question: The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011.

Write a report with this question: The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011.
The provided bar chart illustrates how
people
used
of
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various media to be informed by
news
in five different age
classification
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classifications
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in a
country
in 2011. It can be clearly seen that the highest percentage of
people
in adult
ages
prefered
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preferred
to
listen
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the
radio
to get
news
.
However
,elderly
people
did not tend to get
news
from
micro-bloging
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micro-blogging
very much over the period. In 2011,the
populations
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population
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who were between 30 to 49
years
old chose to be aware of
news
by
radio
(nearly %95) in a
country
.(Which was the highest percentage of
people
over the period).
Moreover
,listening to the
radio
for getting
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news
for
people
who were 18-29
years
old was as popular as
people
in
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50-64
years
old at more than 90
percent
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per cent
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in one
country
in 2011.
In addition
,getting
news
from
radio
for the communities who were more than 65
years
old was considerably more popular than using micro-blogging in
this
age in 2011. Surprisingly,the percentage of populations who preferred to get
news
from social networks in
ages
10-17
years
old
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was completely the same as
people
in
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aged
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ages
18-29
years
old
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at %80 in a region in 2011.
Additionally
,just 10 percent of
population
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the population
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liked to get
news
from digital networks in
ages
over 65
years
old in an area in 2011.
Also
,the proportion of getting information from micro-bloging
in
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ages18-29
years
old was roughly 25 per cent,just ahead of
people
who were
in
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10-17
years
old at
at
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20
%20 in
a
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the
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country
in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, news, country, ages, radio, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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