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Write a report with this question: The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011.

Write a report with this question: The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011.
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The provided bar chart illustrates how
people
 used
of
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various media to be informed by
news
 in five different age
classification
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classifications
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 in a
country
 in 2011. It can be clearly seen that the highest percentage of
people
 in adult
ages
prefered
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preferred
 to
listen
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 the
radio
 to get
news
.
However
,elderly
people
 did not tend to get
news
 from
micro-bloging
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micro-blogging
 very much over the period. In 2011,the
populations
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population
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 who were between 30 to 49
years
 old chose to be aware of
news
 by
radio
 (nearly %95) in a
country
.(Which was the highest percentage of
people
 over the period).
Moreover
,listening to the
radio
for getting
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news
 for
people
 who were 18-29
years
 old was as popular as
people
in
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50-64
years
 old at more than 90
percent
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per cent
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 in one
country
 in 2011.
In addition
,getting
news
 from
radio
 for the communities who were more than 65
years
 old was considerably more popular than using micro-blogging in
this
 age in 2011. Surprisingly,the percentage of populations who preferred to get
news
 from social networks in
ages
 10-17
years
old
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was completely the same as
people
in
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aged
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ages
 18-29
years
old
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at %80 in a region in 2011.
Additionally
,just 10 percent of
population
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the population
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 liked to get
news
 from digital networks in
ages
 over 65
years
 old in an area in 2011.
Also
,the proportion of getting information from micro-bloging
in
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ages18-29
years
 old was roughly 25 per cent,just ahead of
people
 who were
in
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10-17
years
 old at
at
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20
%20 in
a
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the
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country
 in 2011.
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