The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie
chart
depict the causes why Fix the agreement mistake
charts
people
are going to work
by bicycle or car. Overall
, in the first chart
, 60 per cent
of people
choose to use bicycle
because of health and fitness and less Correct article usage
a bicycle
polution
. The rest are other reasons. Correct your spelling
pollution
The
second Change preposition
In the
chart
, people
prefer
use private cars because they feel Add the particle
prefer to
comfort
, at least 40 per Replace the word
comfortable
cent
.
The reasons for cycling to work
is
dominated by health and fitness and less Correct subject-verb agreement
are
polution
with the same Correct your spelling
pollution
percentage
, which is 30 per cent
, respectively. Another reason is there is
no parking problems and the Change the verb form
are
percentage
is 15 per cent
. The cause like
no costs Change preposition
of
also
become
Wrong verb form
became
concern
and got 13 per Correct article usage
a concern
cent
. The last
reason is faster than driving with the least
Correct word choice
lowest
percentage
at 12 per cent
.
Move
to Wrong verb form
Moving
Correct article usage
the other
other
Change the wording
another chart
other charts
chart
, 40 per cent
of people
are enjoy
driving to Change the verb form
are enjoying
work
due to
the
Change the word
their
comfortness
. Correct your spelling
comforts
Then
, 21 per cent
is because the distance of
the office and their home Change preposition
between
too
far. Faster than cycling and need to carry things in Add a missing verb
is too
work
got same
Change the article
the same
percentage
about 14 per cent
. Lastly
, people
think that driving is more safe than cycling and this
reason got 11 per cent
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, people, work, cent, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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