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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement, and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, •describe the situation •explain your problems and why it is difficult to work •say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear sir, I am writing
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 letter to complain about my accommodation. My name is Sumanpreet Kaur and my programme name is AMHW. I visited here
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 month you accommodated me with another student in the college
area
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. In the first days, everything was going well but after that, I suffered from many problems.
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, I cannot focus on my studies. I am sharing some of the problems that I facing nowadays, like she used to play loud music at night and did not clean the
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. I feel very stressed and anxious. She always uses rough words
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 talking with me.
Due to
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 reason, I am unable to concentrate on my college work and I usually miss my tests and assignments. I am requesting that you please change my
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. I want to share my
area
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 with my classmates. If I live with my friends it will be really helpful for me in my studies. I am looking forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Sumanpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure to maintain a clear structure by separating problems and requests into distinct paragraphs.
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Consider adding more details about how the situation affects your studies to strengthen your case.
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The letter maintains a polite tone throughout, demonstrating a suitable writing tone.
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The request for a change in accommodation is clearly stated, making it easy for the reader to understand your need.
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