The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from the sugar canes .
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canes
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Overall
, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with growing the Linking Words
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canes
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crystals.
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canes
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in a crushing device to get juice .
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, juice is passed through a limestone filter for purification. Use synonyms
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, purified juice is heated in an evaporator Linking Words
as a result
it becomes a syrup . In the sixth Linking Words
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is dried and cooled in a drum for market use .Use synonyms
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