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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates data about the underground
railway
 systems in London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kytoto, and LA. data categories by( date of
opened
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opening
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,
kilometres
 of
route
 , and
passengers
 per
year
 in millions).
Overall
, Tokyo has the highest
number
 of
passengers
 per
year
,
while
 Los Angeles has the lowest
number
. London
railway
 systems have
a huge
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huge kilometres
a huge kilometre
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kilometres
 of
route
. In
the
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apply
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contrast, Kyoto has a few
route
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routes
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. Tokyo
railway
 system has
a
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the
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 highest
number
passengers
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of passengers
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 per
year
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the year
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 1927 million
,
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and 155
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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the route
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 less than Paris which has 199
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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the route
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 and only 1191
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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passengers
 every
year
.
However
, London transportation was the first one it opened in 1863 with a huge
kilometres
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kilometre
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394
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of 394
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, but only 775
passengers
 travel
ever
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every
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year
. Washington DC has 126 and their
passengers
 144,
while
 Los Angeles has the
newst
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newest
railway
 system with 28
kilometres
 and 50
travelor
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travellers
.
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However
Howeverm
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However
 the lowest
number
 of
passengers
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, kilometres, route, passengers, year, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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