An English-speaking friend wants to spend two weeks in your country and has written you an email asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • offer to find a place to stay • give advice on what to do • give information about the weather and the clothes to bring

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My dear friend, Thank you for writing. I am glad you are visiting my country. Here is some advice and information that will help you with your
visit
.
Firstly
, I recommend you
visit
Gaza City; you can rent a hotel on the beach. I think you should rent a Palestine hotel since it offers a 5-star service at a moderate price and is located on an amazing view of the beach; I'm sure you will like it. Don't miss out on visiting AL Baqa café, which offers great cold and hot drinks
in addition
to the spectacular view
on
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the sea. You should go to the well-known dessert seller Abo Saud Desert place, which offers a very delicious dessert.
Also
, you should
visit
Metro Market, which provides various food and drink options.
Finally
, don’t forget to
visit
the Alomare Mosque a famous old mosque that has been around
from
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centuries.
Also
, make sure to pack light clothes! The Summer weather here is scorching, so bring plenty of T-shirts and shorts
in
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some days the temperature
reach
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reaches
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40c in other days it
become
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becomes
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more normal.
Furthermore
, you need to get some
sun glasses
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sunglasses
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to protect your eyes from the sun. Best wishes, Ahmed
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Grammar
While your letter is very informative and friendly, make sure to proofread for minor grammatical issues, such as 'there are days the temperature reaches 40°C, whereas the temperature becomes more normal on other days.'
Vocabulary
Consider using a range of vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance your writing further.
Task Achievement
You provided all required information clearly and concisely, including offering to find a place to stay, giving advice on activities, and informing about the weather and clothing recommendations.
Tone
Your letter has a friendly and conversational tone, making it suitable for writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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