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The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#centre #plan #information #features #comparisons
The map depicts a civic centre between now and the future.
Overall
, there are some changes,
such
 as moving the location of
car
parks
, adding
hotel
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hotels
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 and restaurants, and
relocation
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 several places. In general, the
position
 of
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the high
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high street
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High Street
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,
north avenue
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North Avenue
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,
smith street
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Smith Street
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, and
victoria avenue
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Victoria Avenue
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are
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apply
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remain
between
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in
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present
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the present
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 days and
in
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apply
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the future.
Besides
, on the first map, there are many facilities like two
car
parks
,
cinema
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a cinema
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,
exhibition
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an exhibition
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, council offices,
town
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a town
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 hall,
shopping
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a shopping
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 centre,
also
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and also
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library
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a library
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.
Car
parks
 and cinema are
locating
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 in
north
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the north
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position
 and the
rests
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rest
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 are in the south
position
. Meanwhile, the planning is like
this
. There is no
car
 park anymore.
Instead
, there will be underground
car
parks
 and the town hall will be built above it.
Besides
 that, the cafe will be constructed in the corner in
west
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the west
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position
.
On the other hand
, cinema
still
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is still
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on
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in
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 the same
position
.
Next,
hotel
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hotels
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 and restaurants will be made in the corner in
east
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the east
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position
. Not only that, but
also
 council offices will be relocated. The library will be larger and the exhibition will
more
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be more
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 narrow.
Last
,
location
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the location
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 of the shopping centre never changed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, besides".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, parks, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Civic centre
  • Present
  • Plan
  • Comparison
  • Main features
  • Map
  • Summarize
  • Information
  • Report
  • Relevant
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