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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the influx of temporary migrant workers in four nations: Australia, New
Zealand
, The United Kingdom, and the United
States
 between 2003 and 2006,
as well as
 the amount of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
Overall
, all countries witnessed an increasing trend in the given period. The United
States
 had the highest number of
laborers
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labourers
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,
whereas
 New
Zealand
 was the reverse.
However
, The United
States
 experienced the lowest ranking in 2006 and the leading position belonged to New
Zealand
. As can be seen, in 2003, the United
States
 accounted for 577,000, before jumping to 678,000 in 2006. Australia and the United Kingdom witnessed growth, with the former rising from 152,000 to 219,000 and the latter from 137,000 to 266,000, respectively.
Furthermore
, New
Zealand
 increased from 65,000 in 2003 to 87,000 in 2006.
On the other hand
, in terms of temporary migrant workers per 1,000 people in 2006. New
Zealand
 ranked the highest, with 21.1 per 1,000 people.
By contrast
, The United
States
 was the lowest, at 2.3 in 2006.
Then
, Australia and the United Kingdom were 10.7 and 4.4 in 2006, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, states with synonyms.
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