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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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While
 life is turning kind of speedy these days and
time
 passes briskly, ready-to-eat
meals
 have shown as a magical solution for workers and others who don'
t
 have
time
 to cook their
food
.
However
, others think that
this
 trend has some bad consequences.
This
 essay will refer to some studies to highlight the advantages and disadvantages of packaged ready
foods
. On the one hand,
this
 type of
food
 saves
time
 and effort for many, as most workers start their jobs from the early morning until sunset, and others have double jobs on the same day;
thus
, feeding is a priority for them, and packaged ready
foods
 have become a saviour for them.
In addition
, a statistical study published at Harvard University in 2022 illustrated that 80% of employees who eat ready-to-eat
meals
 at work have more work efficiency than those who don'
t
 eat until they return home because they don'
t
 have
time
 to cook.
On the other hand
, convenience
foods
 may have less nutritional value than fresh-cooked
meals
. The process of making these types of
food
 can affect the composition of these ingredients,
as well as
 adding some preservatives which can cause long-term effects on human health. In that case, using
such
 kinds of
food
 may be just a process of feeding and satisfying hunger rather than benefiting from nutrients.
Furthermore
, advanced types of ready
meals
 with higher nutritional values will be at higher prices, which may cause financial obstacles for workers, and they might not buy them because of their high cost.
Additionally
, a study published at Heuston University demonstrated that people who depend on packaged-ready
foods
 are at higher risk for developing obesity and GI diseases
such
 as colon problems than those who cook their own
meals
.
To conclude
, ready-to-eat
meals
 may be a precious saviour for employees and those who don'
t
 have
time
, but they can
also
 be dangerous for long-term use. Cooking from
time
 to
time
 with the use of those types of
food
 would be recommended to make a balance between both health and
time
-effort efficiency.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly from one idea to the next. This will make your essay flow better for the reader.
task achievement
Avoid over-generalizing or using absolute terms such as 'magical solution,' and try to use more academic language.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction clearly sets out the topic and outlines the main points that will be discussed.
relevant specific examples
Good use of specific studies and statistics to support your arguments.

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