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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table provides information about the global electricity
generation
 by various renewable
source
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sources
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 from 2009 to 2012.
Overall
, production of the electric
power
 by hydraulics was at peak position,
while
 solar
energy
 contributed a fraction of
power
.
Furthermore
, all the sources experienced an upward trend.
To begin
 with,
generation
 of the electricity by hydraulics was higher
that
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than
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 bio-mass and wind
energy
. It continued to increase over the period .It was 3329TWh in 2009,
rose
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and rose
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 to 3514.3TWh in 2010 . In 2011 and 2012,
power
generation
 by hydraulics was 3530.8TWh and 3663.4 respectively.
While
,
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power
generation
 by wind and bio-mass in 2012 was 534 and 326.2TWh.
Conversely
 , geothermal and solar
energy
 produced
a
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 least amount of
the
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electricity. Production by geothermal
energy
 increased slightly over the period ,
whereas
 construction of the
power
 by solar efficiency was 21TWh in 2009 and rose dramatically
go
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to
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 104.5
TWh
 in 2012
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words generation, power, energy, twh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable sources
  • Electricity production
  • Significant growth/decline
  • Yearly basis
  • Specific figures
  • Stagnated
  • Regional differences
  • Anomalies
  • Unexpected trends
  • Implications
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