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The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph illustrates the rise of
urban
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the urban
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 population in 4 different parts of the world it
also
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 gives a look into the future .
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 , the urban community seems to have been at a low rate during the 1950
especially
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, especially
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 in 2 continents .
On the other hand
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 , by 2000 there seems to be a dramatic increase in those populations mostly in Latin
america
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America
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although
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 in Asia and Africa as
their
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they are
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 both a bit over 30% .
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 , the highest number of
the
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urban
community
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communities
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 is 40% for the year 1950 in Latin America to be specific . As for the
2000's
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2000s
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where
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when
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 the population grew it surpassed 40% for the whole world .
In addition
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 , by 2030 it is predicted that
their
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there
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 surely be a spur in the percentage of the urban population
for
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in
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 Africa , Asia ,
Latin
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and Latin
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 America with the whole world
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 reaching its highest
perdicted
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predicted
 to be 80% and its lowest 50% so we will face a sure rise of those
coummunties
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communities
.

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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • future predictions
  • historical data
  • urbanization trends
  • rates of growth
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • economic development
  • migration
  • government policies
  • upward trend
  • pace of urbanization
  • catching up
  • comparative analysis
  • regional differences
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