Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to enhance readability and coherence. For example, the sentence "Some believed that male and female students should study on same schools..." should be corrected to "Some believe that male and female students should study in the same schools..."
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples to support your points. This will help in achieving a higher score in task achievement. For example, include specific studies or statistics that back up your claims about performance differences in mono gender schools.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to make the flow of ideas smoother. For example, phrases like "in addition," "furthermore," and "on the contrary" can aid in better connecting your thoughts.
task achievement
The essay addresses both viewpoints on the topic and provides a clear personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is logical, and it includes an introduction and conclusion which wrap up the discussion appropriately.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.